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Three Angels marooned on an island
Feathers clipped, all flight grounded.
Lonely and longing they sing
A mournful song
To the ship on the sea.

The men entranced by the beauty
Of the song of the sirens
They steer the ship to the island.
Lonely and longing they follow
To the reef by the beach.

The sirens they sang
With all their might
To the men longing.
The beauty of their faces
Was too much to bear.

The ship caught the reef
And sunk to the bottom of the sea.
The sirens sang, the men swam to the shore
Only to be devoured, cast away on the bone littered beach.

The anger overwhelmed me.
The horror of the three Angels,
And their mournful song.
To lure men to their deaths
By their beauty.

So I went to the island
The wrath of the sea behind me,
And when they sang to me.
I felt nothing,
And I was determined to defeat them.

One sister, young in life
Smiled at me,
And my heart melted.
She sang her song of longing,
And danced the dance of life.

The other sisters jealous in rage
Tried to take me away from the young one,
And I fought back.
For I had come to realize
That I was in love with that siren...
This is a possible new story, set back in greek mythology. Tell me what you think! This is also my 100th deviation! YAY. There is now a VoiceOver for this poem, done by a fan of mine www.youtube.com/watch?v=K1qawx…  
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buslimpan Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student General Artist
A wonderful poem! It's amazing!
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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williamson13 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

I love the song of the Siren's,

Many a sailor perished at the beauty of their voices,

and the call of the words.Heart 

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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes that's very true. That's what you call deadly beauty
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BlacksmithofAngels Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This could be developed into an amazing work, look forward to seeing it
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You really have something here. It could be quite the tragedy if you wished it. 
So who is this protagonist? A kind of Poseidon or a demigod linked to him? I'm pretty curious at this point.
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I'm so glad someone got that! Yes it's Poseidon. The whole story will be over Demeter loosing Persephone when Hades kidnaped her along with Zeus, she damns the sirens to the island after they gave up on the search of her daughter where they are forced to sing men to their deaths in order to survive, which angers Poseidon. So the whole story is based off that.
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Infinite-Word-Forge Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice! I say you should totally do this story, give it your own spin, your own flavor.
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks I'm highly considering it
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