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Like a ghost in the night
A white shadow in the darkness
Silent as the grave
It hunts you.

Teeth like daggers,
Claws like knifes,
Eyes of an Eagle,
It stalks you.

It can hear your heart quicken
It can smell your fear.
Better run now
Its after you.

Its faster than you
It enjoys the chase
One bite and its over
Its playing with you.

Its breath is on your neck
Its growl is a whisper in your ear
Its ready to pounce.
So tell me
Who's afraid of the big bad wolf?
Another poem, comment and tell me what you think!
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TheDoorWithin Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
!Awesome + plz  I love the mood and the imagery. Really appeals to the senses (and NOT in a good way xD which is awesome cause obviously it's supposed to be scary)!

(One thing. Shouldn't it be 'one", not "once"? Or am I not understanding the context?)
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, I appreciate it. Hug  And yes it is, thank you for pointing that out, I've read this poem over and over again and never seen that haha 
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TheDoorWithin Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! :D Lol, I have done the same thing sooooo many times xD 
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Exciting and fun!:D
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
:D
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EmeraldGuardian-04 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, gosh. xDD Horror isn't my type of thing. I'd be scared dead if this ever happened to me. ^^;
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha me too. What a way to die right?
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Eqonosp Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice :)
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D
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DeeRay16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
As soon as i read "...It can smell your fear.." It reminded me of Jeepers Creepers.
This is great,! :)
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have honestly never seen that before lol I don't like scary movies, and yet I write about werewolves lol. But thanks I'm glad you liked it!
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DeeRay16 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
You did an awesome job :)
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think I like it more when I think it's metaphorical. Like that danger some people make fun of and ends up biting their head of. 

But  could indeed work nicely for fantasy creatures. 
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah its not something you would really want to ACTUALLY happen to you. It would be scary as fudge.
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Brr. It would. 
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
We'll it would be kinda exciting for me since I'm obsessed with wolves and weird like that lol
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe ! The sad part is being eaten, however =/ 
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I probably wouldn't taste very good to the poor thing lol
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wrote something about that XD I used to be obsessed with wolves when I was 12... but I wouldn't taste good either. I drink too much tea ! 
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think I would be a little too fatty and chewy, it would take forever for them to eat me lol
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Although you've mentioned it is about a wolf, this could easily be about a vampire or werewolf 
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very very true, its probably more towards the werewolf, it kinda goes hand in hand with my story Anonymous, were the character is a white werewolf.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now this, this I really, really enjoyed reading. :)

That first stanza really captured me. 

Like a ghost in the night
A white shadow in the darkness  Those two lines are excellent and sets the pace of this, verryyyy well. I like this. :D
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, as I'm sure you can tell I have a thing for wolves so this is one of my favorite poems
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: I can tell! It's really neat, I like it! :D
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